Audience feedback part 3- Emma Robertson

Sophie Rae Denton March 23 at 11:47pm
hey doll! i shall try my best to get it from a media perspective and give criticism constructively!

Non Diegetic sound - good choice of music

Diegetic sound - okay if you want top marks, it needs to be balanced - it's pretty difficult to get the dialogue the same volume level as you've filmed it from different angles but if you can balance them out then that would be more professional.
The part where the girl goes "you're such an idiot"...maybe emphasise that a little bit more because it's too quiet - get her to re-record that particular line in a similar atmosphere, then overdub the sound so it's more clear.
(This is HARD so don't worry if you don't get it perfect).

Camera techniques: Not sure about the random shot of the area at 1.34! lol because none of the characters are looking that way so it can't be described as a point of view shot :S so I don't understand it

Mise-en-scene: pretty good so far!

FX: fade out of the guy is really effective. And the colour change at the end is great, so keep that :)

I don't have a mark scheme on me and this is just off the top of my head from the AQA syllabus. But I hope it works, and you all get As :) xxx

Chloe Thomson March 22 at 8:48pm
this is really good !!
i love the way the girl walks in extreme long shot and drops the paper and falls down! also the match on action with the hands is really good!
only negative thing i would say about this is when they are lying down on the grass, it kind of confussed me with like the opacity? but it's a good idea to show that he's a ghost (if that's the storyline lol)
But all together i think it's soooo good!! well done :)
hope you get a good grade aswell :) xx

Emma Robertson